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The line graph below shows the production of different types of fuel in the UK from 1981 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates a comparison of
manufacture
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the manufacture
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 of major fuels in the UK from 1981 to 2000.
Overall
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, petroleum and natural
gas
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 were the main fuels, which increased noticeably throughout the
period
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,
while
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 coal faced more than
double
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a double
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 decrease.
In addition
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,
coal-the
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the
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 second most popular
fuel
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fuel,
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 was overtaken by natural
gas
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 during the
period
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. The highest production level
was
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apply
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belong
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belonged
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 to petroleum at the beginning of the
period
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at
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, at
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 around 90
energy
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units
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.
Then
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 it rose significantly to 140, before decreasing considerably to 100 in 1990. From 1991 to 1999, it climbed steeply and reached its highest point, before facing a slight drop again in 2000. Natural
gas
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 was the least popular fuel in the
beginning
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beginning,
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 at around slightly under 40
energy
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units
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.
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However
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 a great increase can be seen with natural
gas
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, reaching over 100
energy
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units
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at the end
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 of the
period
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. Coal was the second popular fuel in the first half of the 1980s at around 80
energy
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units
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 ( where it remained ).
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 it declined dramatically by almost a double and reached under 40
energy
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units
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. After a moderate increase, it fell from 60 to approximately 30 in the final of the time.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words gas, period, energy, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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