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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart depicts the manufacturing output of fuels in million tonnes in the United Kingdom between 1981 and 2000. What stands out is
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petroleum
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that petroleum
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 consistently remained the most produced fuel throughout the period.
However
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,
Petroleum
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 started almost at the same level
of
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as
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 coal
respectively
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, respectively
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 90 and 80
Energy
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units
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.
Thereafter
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,
Petroleum
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 started to increase sharply from 90
energy
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units
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 in 1981 to 14
Energy
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units
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 in 1984 , and it remained constant until 1987 when it started to slump to 100
energy
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units
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. Despite
this
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 decrease, it started to rise slowly until 1992, where it rose steadily until 1996 and it
becomed
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became
 roughly constant. Turning to another aspect related to coal and natural
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gas
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gas,
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 they fluctuated a lot.
Moreover
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, the coal started to plummet
at
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in
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 1993
becoming
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, becoming
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 under the natural
gas
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at
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with
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 40
millions
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million
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 tonnes of oil produced
energy
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 equivalent in
1985
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1985,
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 just for one year
and
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, and
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 it
gone
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went
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 back up until 1986
at
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apply
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60 and it slowly decreased until 2000 and
going
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went
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 under natural
gas
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 in 1992. In parallel
Natural
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, Natural
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 was stable at 40
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tones
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tons
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 from 1981 to 1989.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore,
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 it started in 1990 to rise tremendously and surpassed the coal amount in 1992 and
going
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reaching
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 over 100
energy
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units
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.
Overall
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,
Petroleum
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 production has been the highest over the period
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while
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, while
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 Coal
decrease
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decreased
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globally
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globally,
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while
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 Natural
gas
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 rate increased and
have
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has
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 exceeded the coal rate since the middle of the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, energy, units, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • main kinds of fuel
  • time frame
  • location
  • data
  • trends
  • increase
  • decrease
  • specific data points
  • petroleum
  • nuclear fuel
  • natural gas
  • coal
  • fluctuations
  • correlations
  • patterns
  • analyze
  • summarize
  • provide
  • general summary
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