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The chart below shows the results of a European survey into young people's expectations for change in five different areas of life in the next 20 years. They were asked if they thought things would improve or get worse. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart provides information on how youth
expects
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expect
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 things in five categories to change over a 20-year period in Europe.
Overall
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, five important areas were included
into
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in
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 the survey, namely, communication between
people
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, quality of food, water, air in the city and health. The negative tendency is seen in all categories except for communications between
people
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, which is expected to be improved,
while
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 air pollution is a greater concern to be worried about. It is evident that more than half participants of the survey think that in the next 20 years things
such
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 as good food, water and health will no longer be available
and
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, and
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 the situation will get worse. 70% of young
people
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 suggest that in the future
one
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, one
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 of the biggest concerns will be the lack of high-quality air,
while
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 only 23% of participants think
otherwise
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.
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, 54% of young Europeans hope that communication between
people
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 will get better in a 20-year period, which makes
this
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 section the only one with a positive outcome.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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