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Writing Samples
Band 4

You and your family visit the local shopping mall every week. However, it has become more and more difficult to find a parking spot recently. You would like to let the shopping mall manager know about this problem. Your email should do the following things: Describe the problem you are having with the mall’s parking. Explain what you and your family have to do in order to visit the shopping mall now. Provide some suggestions for how the mall manager can solve this problem.

How
everythingʼs
Verb problem
is everythingʼs
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 going well
.
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 I wanted to share my experience with
loccal
Correct your spelling
local
 shopping to buy things for
family
Correct pronoun usage
my family
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 every
sunday
Fix capitalization
Sunday
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. As I think youʼd find it
intresting
Correct your spelling
interesting
.I particularly enjoyed
to purchise
Verb problem
purchasing
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this
Linking Words
 shop .Honestly, I believe you liked it and
find
Wrong verb form
found
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 which research things would make it even better. Speak soon. Janona

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task response
Make a clear aim at the start. Say you are checking the essay for score.
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Use one idea per line and short, simple sentences.
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Add a clear end. A short sign off helps.
coherence cohesion
Fix miss spell and wrong words. Use easy words.
coherence cohesion
Put the ideas in order. Use 'first, then, next, finally' or 'in the end' to show flow.
tone
Warm tone in some lines.
content
Idea of sharing with reader is clear.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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