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You are about to go on vacation for a month. A friend from another town will come and stay in your apartment. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: Explain where your friend can get the key to the apartment Give your friend some instructions about using your apartment Recommend some places to go

Dear Ms Ngoc, I hope
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 doing well
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 I'm fine. I am writing to share about to going on vacation for a month. I heard that you will come to my town next month, I'm happy. But what a pity, because I will go on vacation for a month in Da Nang City with my parents. You come and stay in my
apartment
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. I will give my
apartment
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 house for my brother, who will give my
apartment
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 to you. When you come to my town. My
apartment
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 is easy to use
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therefore
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 you can open it easily. My
apartment
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 has 2 bedrooms, 1 kitchen and 1 toilet, and especially 1 balcony, where you can enjoy .
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 left my
apartment
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 has
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/7store and a coffee shop, I think it is convenient and flexible. I hope you like it. When will you come? Please reply to me. Wish best wishes. van anh

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content
Explain clearly how to get the key. Say who will give it to you and when.
structure
Use one idea per sentence. A few long lines make the read hard.
grammar
Fix subject and verb form. For example, 'I am writing to tell you I will go on vacation.'
content
Make the plan clear. Add a short note on when you will be away.
content
Invite with one or two places to go near the flat.
tone
Close the letter with a kind end, like 'Best wishes' or 'Yours faithfully'.
tone
The greeting is clear.
content
The letter tells what the flat has (2 bedrooms, kitchen, balcony).
communication
The writer asks the friend to reply.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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