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Writing Samples
Band 5

A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice

Dear Tom, I hope
this
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 letter finds you in
your
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good health and spirit. I'm writing
this
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 letter to give you some tips on making
friends
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 in the new schools that you recently joined.
To begin
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 with, the best way to connect with anyone is to share things. From my personal experience,
students
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 love to eat
foods
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food
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 from different
students
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, especially
home made
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homemade
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 foods.
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, if you are able to share your lunch during
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recess time with other
students
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, it would be easy to make good
friends
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 in the class.
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, being an academic topper can
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assit
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assist
 you to connect with like-minded
students
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.
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, if you find difficulty in
make
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making
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friends
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 in the classroom, you can try to join the basketball team, where you can find
students
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 from different grades, who are mature and welcoming.
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, art and dance clubs have creative and talented
students
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, who are
extrovert
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as well as
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 smart. So, you will not feel left out because over there everyone talks to each other.
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,
i
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I
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 like to give advice that you should be more open, and talk with
everyone
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everyone,
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 that's how you can make new
friends
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, and be prepared to face rejection and
humilation
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humiliation
 because it helps to build you as
a
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an
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overall
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 social being. I'll be happy to meet you soon with positive feedback on making new
friends
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. Bye, Jerry.

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language
Fix small spell mistakes like 'assit', 'humilation', and 'overall' to make the text clear.
tone
The letter has a kind and warm tone that can help a friend.
content
It gives clear ideas like joining clubs and doing activities.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • introduce yourself
  • genuine interest
  • rapport
  • like-minded individuals
  • school community
  • volunteer
  • open-minded
  • comfort zone
  • casual setting
  • hobbies and activities
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