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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The data
dispalys
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displays
 the proportion of the
population
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 in India,China,
USA
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the USA
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 and Japan in 1950 and 2002 with predictions for 2050.
Overall
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, the
population
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 number is declining over the periods given in
majority
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the majority
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 for China
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then
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, then
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USA
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the USA
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 and Japan.
However
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, India is showing a
complete
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 different trend
in contrast
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 with other countries. On the one hand, China has the highest
population
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 among the others, in 1950 reached almost 24% of
total
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the total
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 world
population
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but
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, but
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expected
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is expected
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 to decrease to 15% by 2050. Meanwhile,
USA
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the USA
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population
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 recorded around 7% in 1950 but
then
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 decreased in 2002 to 5% and
predicted
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is predicted
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 to remain the same by 2050. In Japan, the trend is declining over the given time.
On the other hand
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, India's
population
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 is showing an upward trend in
population
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 rate. In 1950,the rate
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was
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 15% and increased slightly to around 17% in 2002
,
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;
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 by
2050
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2050,
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% percentage is projected to be almost 19%.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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