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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs provide the key information about the
subscriptions
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 to mobile and fixed
phone
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 lines in
Eritrea
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,India,
UK
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the UK
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 and Uruguay
frome
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from
 2005 to 2015. The units are
meaured
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measured
 in
number
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 of
subscriptions
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 per hundred people.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
the
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apply
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Uruguay recorded the highest
fiugres
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figures
 of mobile
phone
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subscriptions
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 per hundred people.
In addition
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,
UK
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the UK
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 has
leading
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the largest number
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 of
flixed
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fixed
 telephone
,
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lines, whereas
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whereas
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the
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apply
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Eritrea
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 and India registered the lowest
number
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 of fixed
phone
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 lines.
According to
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 what is shown
Uruguay
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, Uruguay
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 in 2005 had
the
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apply
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50 mobile
phone
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subscriptions
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while
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, while
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 the
number
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are
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is
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 going to increase from 50 to 140 in 2015. For
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Eritrea
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Eritrea,
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 the
fiigers is
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figures
remaind
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remained
 stable from 2005 until 2015. In
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terms
termas
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termas,
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 the
fiugers
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figures
 of the UK reached a peak from 2005 to 2015
which
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, which
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 was about 59 in 2005
and
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, and
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 the
fiugres decrase
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figures decreased
 to 50 in 2015.
Moreovere
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Moreover
,
the
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apply
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Eritrea
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 and India
has
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have
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 the same
number
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 of fixed
phone
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 lines from 2005 to 2015
which
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, which
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 was around 5
ubscriptions
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subscriptions
 per hundred people.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words subscriptions, phone, eritrea, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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