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The flow chart illustrates the consequence of deforestation. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The flow chart illustrates the consequence of deforestation. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The graph displays the results of deforestation.
Overall
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, there
is
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are
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 4 main consequences for
this
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 process and the results
including
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, including
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:
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apply
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 flooding and less biodiversity.
To begin
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 with, equipment used to
compresses
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compress
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 the soil to harden
shape
Correct article usage
the shape
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 ,after the
raind water
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rainwater
 runs off
flooding
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, flooding
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occur
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occurs
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. The other way is to cut until there
is
Verb problem
apply
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a fewer roots that lift the top soil
to
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, to
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decreased
Wrong verb form
decreases
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 vegetation
causes
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and causes
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 less
bioavailabilty
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bioavailability
.
Moreover
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, there is a high risk
for
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of
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 burning the tree as it will decrease the
microroganisms
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microorganisms
food
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food,
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also
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will decreases
Wrong verb form
decreasing
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 the wildlife.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flow chart
  • consequence
  • deforestation
  • process
  • cutting down
  • loss
  • forest cover
  • wildlife habitat
  • disruption
  • ecosystems
  • soil erosion
  • water quality
  • release
  • carbon dioxide
  • atmosphere
  • contribute
  • global warming
  • climate change
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