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tipping is a common practice at restaurant in many countries. some people beleive tipping a great way to apreciate service workers, other think it should be the responsibility of the boss. discuss both sides and give your opinion

In many countries, tipping is common practice in restaurants , and some agree with that opinion, but
on the other hand
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, some claim that it ought to be the responsibility of the manager. In the following paragraphs, both opinions will be discussed.
Firstly
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, in some jobs wage may be low and leaving a
tip
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 will help to staff raise their income. Tipping may encourage fast, polite help and improve service quality.
For example
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, the restaurant which allows leaving a
tip
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 will be more successful because when workers get a
tip
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, they become more polite .
Therefore
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, their productivity and efficiency are increasing , which leads to more customers ;
as a result
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, these workers' salaries are increasing.
To conclude
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,
this
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 restaurant is growing noticeably.
However
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, tipping may create unfair pay, which can lead to unfocused staff. They may focus only on wealthy customers to get tips, and because of
this
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, ordinary
deal
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deals
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 may be ignored by
company
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the company
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.
For instance
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, some small start-ups are closing because
enterprise
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enterprises
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 are not getting quality care. Despite
this
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, waiters ask for a
tip
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as a result
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, which leads to the restaurant closing.
Overall
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, my view is that
band
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bands
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 should get a fair wage , and tips should be allowed and at the client's choice.

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structure
Use a clear intro that states your view and a clear end that restates it.
grammar
Keep sentences short. One idea per sentence helps flow.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, so to keep the flow.
content
Give one simple example for each point and explain it.
content
The essay shows both sides of the topic.
structure
The writer gives a final view.
cohesion
There are some linking words that help the flow.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tip
  • tips
  • tipping
  • service
  • worker
  • staff
  • server
  • customer
  • boss
  • employer
  • wage
  • pay
  • income
  • money
  • extra
  • reward
  • incentive
  • fair
  • unfair
  • culture
  • country
  • bill
  • included
  • service charge
  • optional
  • share
  • pool
  • transparent
  • tax
  • work
  • restaurant
  • guest
  • idea
  • opinion
  • discuss
  • benefit
  • drawback
  • policy
  • plan
  • solution
  • respect
  • value
  • quality
  • customer
  • care
  • equal
  • cost
  • change
  • suggest
  • future
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