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The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkwort and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two diagrams illustrate the transmigration of the insect
silkwort
Correct your spelling
silkworm
 and the process of making
silk
Use synonyms
 material.
Overall
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, we can see that the silkworm has 4 phases in its life cycle.
Also
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, the production of
silk
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 clothes consists of 5 stages.
According to
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 the data given, the very first stage is when the silkworm butterfly lays its eggs in a period that consists of 10 days; after that, the eggs start to crack and turn into the second phase, which is called larva. In
this
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 stage,
larva
Correct article usage
the larva
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 feeds on mulberry leaves. In the span of 4 to 6 weeks, the larva starts to wrap itself in
silk
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 thread. In 3 to 8 days, a cocoon is formed, and in 16 days, it becomes an adult moth.
Furthermore
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, the production of
silk
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 clothes all happens in one machine. The machine begins to collect the cocoon and put it in a container
that is
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 filled with water to boil the cocoon. After that, the machine starts to unwind and thread the
silk
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while
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 twisting it. As for the final step,
it is clear that
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 they dye the material and weave it.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words silk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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