The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table highlights what , in the
last
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year,
men
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and
women
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without jobs in the UK have dedicated their time to.
This
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data is measured in percentage.
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, job hunting seems to be the most common amongst
men
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in the early hours of the day , with 22
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per cent
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,
while
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housework is the largest for females in the morning at 49
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.
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, before noon, household chores, shopping and job hunting seem to take the lead in both genders at 19, 20 and 22 for
men
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and 49, 26 and 16 for
women
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, respectively. The other factors are less than 15 % with drinking at 2 for
men
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and 1 for
women
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.
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, in midday, we see a dramatic change in
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dynamic for males, ranging between 12-14. TV scores the highest at 14, followed by gardening at 13 , and
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coming close is both job hunting and visiting friends at 12.
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,
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,
women
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during
this
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moment of the day have a higher range of 15% or more,
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their time between housework at 21 and shopping and visiting friends or relatives at 17. Once again with home duties are the highest at 21. At zero , being the lowest on the female range, comes playing sports and staying in bed.
Men
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,
however
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, spend 1% of their time staying in bed.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • spend
  • spent
  • time
  • last year
  • unemployed
  • most
  • least
  • share
  • percent
  • percentage
  • activity
  • types of activity
  • work
  • job search (if shown)
  • leisure
  • sleep
  • hours
  • overall
  • in general
  • more than
  • less than
  • as well as
  • also
  • but
  • however
  • similarly
  • whereas
  • than
  • equal
  • noted
  • big
  • small
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