The pie charts give information about the average household consumption in Japan and Malaysia in five categories.

The pie charts provide data on the average spending of
homes
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households
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in both
Japan
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and
Malaysia
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according to
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five categories.
Overall
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, money spent on housing, food, and other goods and services
make
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makes
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up the large bulk of spending for both countries.
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,
Japan
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spends 3
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percent
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per cent
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more than
Malaysia
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on housing, adversely
Malaysia
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spends 3
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percent
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per cent
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more than
Japan
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on food.
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,
Malaysia
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spends 3
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percent
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per cent
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less on food in comparison to
Japan
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. All three categories
are
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have a difference of 3 percentage
.
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points.
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Interestingly,
Japan
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spends 10
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percent
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per cent
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more than
Malaysia
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on transport,
whereas
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Malaysia
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spends 13
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percent
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per cent
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more than
Japan
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on other goods and services. Spending is over 10
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percent
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per cent
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in the two categories being compared for both countries.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, malaysia, percent with synonyms.
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