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The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

This
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 graph
analyze
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analyses
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 the changes
of
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in
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monthly
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the monthly
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prices
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 of three different
metal
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metals
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 in the year of 2014.
This
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 graph
calculate
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calculates
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 its graph by comparing the older
month
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's price with the latest
month
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 in percentages. To start off, by January, nickel held the highest
pricest
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price
 among the three
metal
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metals
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 as it
increases
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increased
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about
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by about
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 6
percent
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 in
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percent
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cent
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 than the previous
month
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, followed by
copper
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copper,
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whos
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whose
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increase
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price increase
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 in the
prices
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 only about 2
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percent
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per cent
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 that the
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month
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previous month
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before
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apply
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. And
last
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 but not least, Zinc
prices
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is
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have
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 only
rose
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risen
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 about 1
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percent
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per cent
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from than
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than
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what
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it
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they
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had
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were
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 in
the
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apply
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December
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apply
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month
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. And by February,
although
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 nickel
prices
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is
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had
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drop
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dropped
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 by 4
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percent
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per cent
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 compared
from
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to
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 the previous
month
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,
its
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it's
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 still
being
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apply
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the
most
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largest
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 increase in
prices
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than
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apply
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3
of
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among
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 the
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three metal
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metal
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metals
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 compared. And followed by zinc
whos
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whose
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 percentage rose dramatically
of
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by
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 about 2
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percent
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per cent
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 in total, leaving zinc
at
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in
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the
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apply
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last
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 place
by
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as
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 the price decreased by half
of
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apply
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it
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apply
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.
Overall
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, in the following
month
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 after February, Nickel
prices
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 continued to drop off until it
reach
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reached
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it
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its
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 turning point
at
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in
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 June and
continue
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continued
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 to
increases
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increase
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 in percentages again later. And for the copper metal,
It
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it
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 showed a
concistency
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consistency
 of
prices
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 by staying
in
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within
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 1
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percent
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per cent
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in
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on
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 average.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, month, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Price fluctuation
  • Average monthly change
  • Trend
  • Increase/decrease
  • Peak/trough
  • Stability
  • Volatility
  • Comparative analysis
  • Market factors
  • Economic events
  • Historical influence
  • Performance metrics
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