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Most employers nowadays put increasing emphasis on social skills. Some people believe that social skills are important in addition to good qualification for job success. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years,
individual's
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an individual's
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 social
skills
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 have become important
as well as
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 qualifications. Most companies are looking to human capabilities in dealing and interacting with others. From my
experience
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experience,
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 I found that social competence is required and can have a significant impact on hiring and promotion decisions.
in
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this
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essay
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essay,
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 I will discuss
this
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 point and
provid
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provide
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strength
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strengthen
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 the idea. Nowadays, if we look at the
job
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 recruiting websites, we will find that soft
skills
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 are
parts
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part
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 of the requirements that the employers are looking for.
Moreover
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, social abilities are among the recruiting points.
For instance
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,
linked in
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LinkedIn
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 is one of the famous
job
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 advertising sites
, if
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. If
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 we review the requirements for different opportunities on any
job
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 advertising channels, we will find that employers are looking for social
skills
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.
Moreover
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, some big companies are looking for candidates who have
high
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a high
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 level of social competencies, which
is
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include
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 intelligent social communication
skills
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.
This
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 skill is very important for any position as
they
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it
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shape
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shapes
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 the
relation
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relationship
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 between the employee and the other parties. Sometimes, companies may lose certain opportunities or fail to proceed with important projects if their employees are missing
this
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 sense. Another example which shows how
this
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 kind of skill is crucial for any career is during the interview. Usually, the
job
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 interview is run through a
specialized
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specialised
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 committee that includes HR specialists
and
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, and
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 their role is to focus on assessing the social
skills
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for
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of
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 the candidate. On
other
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the other
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 hand, a lot of
job
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 reports are talking about how individuals should improve their capabilities to cope with the market needs. They are
emphasizing
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emphasising
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 how important it is to train ourselves to gain
this
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 skill, and
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therefore
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therefore,
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 we will find a lot of opportunities. Interacting with one another, especially
work
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the work
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 director,
job
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 college, and
clients
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clients,
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are
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is
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 the cornerstone for any work achievements .
Furthermore
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, numerous recruiting campaigns are focusing on enhancing these
skills
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. They provide professional programs that on
developing
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develop
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 social and communication abilities. They are aiming to equip people with
required
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the required
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skills
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 to apply for any
job
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.
Moreover
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, they provide professional certificates as
approval
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proof of
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the programs
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programs
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program's
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 success. In summary, I can say that social
skills
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is
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are
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 very important and might be equal to qualification requirements that employers are looking
to
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for
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. Employees and
job
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 candidates should work
hardly
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hard
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 to enrich their CVs with professional certificates that improve their social capabilities.

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task
State your view clearly at the start and keep it in all parts of the essay.
structure
Divide the essay into four clear parts: intro, two body parts, and a short ending.
examples
Give more clear and real examples from job life to show each point.
language
Use short, simple sentences and check basic grammar and spelling.
content
The writer tries to answer the question and talks about social skill.
coherence
Link words like Moreover and Furthermore show some flow.
structure
There is a clear flow in some parts and the main idea is kept.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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