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Band 2

The average number of hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart illustrates the number of teaching
hours
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 per year completed by
teachers
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 in Japan,
Spain
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, Ireland and the
USA
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 in 2001.
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,
teachers
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 spent most of their time teaching at
upper
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the upper
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 secondary level in all countries.
In addition
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, the
USA
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 recorded the highest teaching
hours
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,
while
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 Japan had the lowest. The
USA
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 and
Spain
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teachers
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 spent the highest time among the others.
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, the upper secondary level
teachers
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 in
Spain
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 spent around 1000
hours
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, but students in the
USA
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 received more than that
about
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, about
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 1300. After that,
teachers
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 in lower secondary and primary schools in the
USA
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 worked more than
teacher
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teachers
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 in
Spain
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 for the same group. Meanwhile,
teachers
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 in
Irland
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Ireland
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shows
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show
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 a
fluctuated
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fluctuating
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 trend where primary students received the lowest
hours
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roughly
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, roughly
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 600
hours
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 per year and the highest in lower secondary
with
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, with
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 800. Japan was the lowest among the others. Primary and lower secondary schools spent only 600
hours
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while
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, while
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 upper secondary about 620
hours
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only
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apply
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.

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task response
Task response: The message tries to sum up the chart but some facts are not true. Say what the chart shows clearly. Do not add guesses. Refer to hours per year and the four countries. Give a real overall trend, then describe each country or each level.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and structure: Use a clear plan. Start with a short view (overview). Then give details by country or by level. Use linking words such as first, also, but, however. End with a short line that sums up.
language
Language and grammar: Use simple, correct sentences. Fix spelling, like Ireland not Irland. Use 'teachers' hours' not 'students'. Keep the tense and subject clear. Check numbers and phrases like 'about 1300 hours' rather than 'more than that about 1300'.
content
The opening line shows the general idea of high hours at upper level.
structure
The writer uses data from all four countries.
content
There is an attempt to give an overview before details.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual hours of teaching
  • teaching workload
  • educational systems
  • teacher-student ratio
  • significantly
  • slightly
  • noticeably
  • gap
  • highest/lowest number of hours
  • compare
  • contrast
  • reflect
  • variations
  • distribution of teaching hours
  • average
  • respectively
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