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The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton attractions in England from 1980 to 2010.

This
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 line graph demonstrates the percentage of different
attractions
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 visited by tourists in Brighton, England
betwen
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between
 the years 1980 and 2010.
Overall
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, the Pier and the Pavilion showed a rising trend,
whereas
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 the
attractions
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 that decreased were
Art
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the Art
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 Gallery and the festival. Even though there were some fluctuations during the years, the
attractions
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 that increased were the
Pavillon
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Pavilion
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 and the Pier. The Pavilion rose steadily from nearly 25% in 1980 to almost 50% in 1995 before dropping to 30% in 2010, being the most visited out of the four.
On the other hand
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, the Pier, starting with 10% in 1980, was the least preferred place. After some ups and downs throughout the years, it climbed to above 20% leaving the
last
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 place to the Art Gallery. There were certain
attractions
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 that showed a falling trend. The one that made the most drastic change
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was
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 the Art Gallery, which was slightly above 20% in 1980 and
althought
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although
 it jumped to almost 40% in 1985, it
plumeted
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plummeted
 again to 20% in 1990. By the year
2010
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2010,
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 it had gone down to less than 10% and was the least
traveled
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 place. The festival varied
the
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apply
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less during the timeframe. Starting with 30% in 1980 and ending with a little less than 30% in 2010,
while
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 having very
controled
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controlled
 changes in between.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words attractions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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