The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph gives data about the worldwide sales of
computerized
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computerised
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games
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from 2000 to 2006.
Overall
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, there was a rise in certain types of
games
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,
such
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as mobile phone, online and handheld
games
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. In the
mean time
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meantime
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, console
games
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were on the
downfall
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decline
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. Out of all the
games
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that rose, the most bought game was handheld
games
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. Starting with a little less than 12 billion dollars in 2000, and reaching almost 18 billion dollars in the
6 year
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6-year
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period. The sale of online
games
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, in 2001, wasn't very significant but showed a steady increase during the years, the same as mobile phone
games
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. The two were nearly
head to head
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head-to-head
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most of the time.
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, by the
end
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end,
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online
games
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took over mobile
games
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. The one game that showed a falling trend was console
games
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,
although
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it was a very slight and controlled drop.
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their
vend
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debt
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was close to 6
bilion
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billion
dollars in 2000, by the year 2006 it
decreased
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had decreased
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almost half the amount, finishing the time period
with
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in
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the
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apply
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last
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place.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words games with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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