The pie charts below show the percentage of electricity production by fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010.

The pie charts below
depicts
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the total percentage of electricity produced by fuel in France
within
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a
20 years
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20-year
gap.
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, it is evident to note that within the years, nuclear
power
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became the most dominant source of fuel,
whereas
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hydro
power
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had a decline to become the least
utilized
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source in the chart. In 1990, both natural gas and coal
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to
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the highest consumption at 28% equally,
this
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is followed by oil at 22%,
while
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nuclear
power
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and hydro
power
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accounts
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for the least in the chart at 17% and 6%, respectively. In sharp contrast to 1990, the year 2010 had nuclear
power
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as the highest
utilized
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source of fuel, which sums up to 67%.
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is seconded by the oil and coal
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, which
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share similar values at 13%.
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, nuclear gas had a major decline through the years to
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for 4%
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.
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Moreso
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, the same for hydro
power
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which
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, which
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can be referred to as the least amount of consumption in the chart
at
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, at
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2%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words power with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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