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You recently stayed in a hotel for two nights. The room was noisy at night, and the bathroom was not clean. You also asked the staff to fix the issue but nothing changed. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter: explain what the problems were describe how it affected your stay say what action you want the manager to take

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to draw your attention to an issue with my recent stay at your hotel. Services were not the same as what was expected
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. It has been quite disappointing
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 when I discovered a broken toilet seat in my hotel room.
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crack
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 water was
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all over the floor, which made it unhygienic to use.
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 the sound insulation in the room was
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 appropriate, I was able to hear the noise of television sets from my adjacent rooms. I have made the reservation to get some rest, but it turned out to be completely opposite. I have contacted the staff to change my room, but the response was not satisfactory because
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 was fully booked for that night. Despite
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 they have not made any attempt to fix any of those
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.
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bad
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 stay, I had not
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adequate sleep. As my stay was
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 blunder, I have left the review on
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. It would be great if you
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 me a refund. I would appreciate
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 you carry out a deep audit on my stay, you may realise what
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 faced that night. Yours sincerely, Lina.

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structure
Put one idea in each paragraph. Start with the problem, then what you want.
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Use clear links. Separate the room issue from the fix request.
content
Be exact. Say the night, what you asked for, and how you want it fixed or paid back.
language
Check grammar and word use. Use simple, common words.
tone
Keep a polite tone. Do not use strong words or say 'blunder'.
content
End with a clear ask about money back or refund, and how you want it done.
structure
You begin with a polite tone.
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You tell what you want, a refund.
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You say you asked staff to fix the issues.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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