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The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table depicts the
lunch
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 and
dinner
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sales
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 volumes in a local restaurant in the week of October from
7th
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the 7th
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 to
13th
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the 13th
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. İt can be seen that the
dinner
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sales
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 received the lion's share
in
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on
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the given all
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all the given
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 days;
however
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, the reverse was true for
lunch
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sales
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. Getting back to details, customers attached utmost importance to having
dinner
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 on Friday with 4,350
dollars
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, and the second most popular day was on Tuesday with 3,850
dollars
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. Between Tuesday and Thursday, there was a negligible difference
with
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 only 50
dollars
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.
In contrast
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, the weekend
dinner
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sales
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 accounted for the lowest income with 2.900 and 2.450
dollars
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 respectively.
In addition
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,the income of Sunday
dinner
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 and 
Thueday
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Thursday
lunch
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 were
the
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at the
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 same
levels
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. Turning to details,
lunch
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sales
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 volumes on Wednesday were the highest with 2.595
dollars
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, exceeding that of the other
lunch
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sales
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.
However
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, Sunday
lunch
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sales
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 experienced the lowest revenue with 1.550
dollars
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 in all other days and
sales
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words lunch, dinner, sales, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuations
  • peak sales
  • troughs
  • seasonal adjustments
  • promotional impact
  • customer footfall
  • external factors
  • forecasting
  • performance analysis
  • trend analysis
  • sales metrics
  • business district
  • revenue streams
  • consumer behavior
  • market trends
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