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Some people think that developed conutries have a higher responsibility to combat climate changes than developing countries. other believe that all the countries should have the same responsibility towards protecting the environment. Discuss both these view and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevent example from your own knowledge or experiance.

In the contemporary era, where accountability caused by environmental setback has been significantly
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, the question of whether
countries
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 of moneyed folk have to contribute more than other
communites
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communities
 has sparked a considerable debate. Even though some advocates might claim that in order to resolve climate
change
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 all
countries
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 have the same responsibility, it is a lucid fact that wealthy
countries
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 should struggle to tackle environmental problems.
This
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assay
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 will examine why developed
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communities
 have
the
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more
accountabilities
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. On the one hand, it is an undeniable fact that solving the climate crisis
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effort
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 of countless
countries
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. Because few citizens cannot leverage their clout.
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, resolving
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global warming, which is a
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major
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 setback
of
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Earth
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the Earth
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,
needs
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a
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 lot of efforts of various
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such
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 as Britain, the United States, China, Korea, Germany, and France. At
this
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 moment,
each
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 authorities cooperate to make international regulations and incentives for the emission of carbon dioxide.
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, engaging many lands in environmental changes is crucial.
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, despite these facets, the difference in the weight of accountability between
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 is vital. low-income regions, because, are prone to failure the paying
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these burdens,
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 wealthier states are likely to face financial pressure from environmental matters.
United
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states
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,
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, can easily invest 600 billion dollars
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 the domains of sustainable environment. But one of the communities in Africa can not pay 60 billion dollars for these problems.
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, moneyed folk
countries
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 have more responsibility than others. In conclusion, myriad
countries
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 ought to resolve environmental changes.
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,
Wealth
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conutries
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countries
 have more
responsbilities
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responsibilities
 than low-income
countries
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.

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task response
Plan your essay. Start with a clear view, then talk about both sides and end with your own view.
cohesion
Use small links to join ideas. Use words like first, next, but, however, so to show flow.
examples
Give brief real examples that fit the point. Be careful with facts and numbers.
grammar
Check spell and form. Fix easy errors like conutries, commuities, and other wrong spell.
content
The idea is clear: richer countries should do more.
structure
It has an intro, body and end.
examples
Examples from real world are used.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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