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Band 4.5

The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table demonstrates the percentages of family
earning
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earnings
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 per month, which is paid out for four different expenditures, namely food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment, in five
counties
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countries
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 of
Europea
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Europe
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, including France,
Gremany
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Germany
,
UK
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the UK
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, Turkey and Spain.
Overall
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, in all
countries
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countries,
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 people mostly spend money on eating and housing compared to clothes and entertainment.
To begin
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 with, it is evident that three countries
which
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, which
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 are France, Germany and
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the UK
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UK
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UK,
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 use up nearly the same amount of funding for food and
drink
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drink,
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that
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which
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 are
colculated
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calculated
for
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at
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 25 %, 22% and 27% and householding
with
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at
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 31 %, 33% and 37% respectively.
While
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 Turkey and Spain are vice versa which Food and drink are bought more (36% and 31%)
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,
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and housing
equipments
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equipment
are
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is
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 less (20% and 18%).
Further
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 analysing the table, residents of all five countries are not
much
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very
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 fond of buying clothes and spending time for joy. Their
spandings
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expenditures
 are measured around 10% for clothing and 15 % for entertainment.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion of monthly household income
  • illustrates
  • cost of living
  • prioritization
  • balanced distribution
  • cultural emphasis
  • significant portion
  • reflects lifestyle
  • economic emphasis
  • category
  • allocate
  • notable amount
  • consumption pattern
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