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Writing Samples
Band 2

The three pictures show the position of a volcano, and a village before and after volcanic eruption.

The three maps illustrate the data about the
spot
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location
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 of
volcano
Correct article usage
the volcano
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 and the sooner and later
condition
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conditions
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 of the village after volcanic
exploitation
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eruption
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.
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, before the eruption the there
was
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were
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 2 main
civilized
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civilised
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 areas
,
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;
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however
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, after the
disaster
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disaster,
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the
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a
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 large part of the city was destroyed by the influx of
the
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apply
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lava and rocks. The position of the volcano is prescribed in the
west
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western
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 side of the village, which is a miracle, since if by chance it
was
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were
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 in the
center
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centre
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, no residential area would survive. As it was mentioned, the 2 crowded areas exist, the large and the smaller
one
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ones
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. The more substantial living place is located in the
center
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centre
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, which took the most harm for itself. The unstoppable
steam
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stream
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 of lava just erased an enormous part of the larger living space,
while
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 it did not even reach the other area.
However
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, the noticeable part of it was demolished by the rocks from the volcano.
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, all the greenery was left under the lava.

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task response
Check the task. Say what the maps show and how the village changes before and after. Use clear, simple facts.
coherence
Make a small plan: one intro, two body parts, one short end. Use easy linking words like first, then, and, so.
lexical
Use easy, correct words. Avoid big or wrong words. For example, use eruption, not exploitation.
coherence
Tell exactly what parts of the map change. Name places like west, center, and north in a clear order.
content
You note there are two areas before and after the eruption.
content
You describe how lava and rocks affect places.
content
You point to the volcano having a position on the map.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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