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The graph below shows the population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Abdu 2

The line graph provides data about how many individuals in
India
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 and
China
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 over the 20-year period
and
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 forecasts the growth of the population till 2050.
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, what stands out from the graph is that there were considerable upward trends in the population of both
India
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 and
China
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. Another interesting point is that
China
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 was the most filled country with
people
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,
whereas
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 the
residents
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population
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 of
India
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were
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was
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 higher than the other. In 2000,
China
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 was the dominant country
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 it had just over 1.2
billion
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people
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, but the inhabitants of
India
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were
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had
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 1.0
inhabitants
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billion inhabitants
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.
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 it rose sharply until 2020
at
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to
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 1.4
billion
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 residents. Having remained stable at just over 1.4
in
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individuals in
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nearly
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apply
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2026,
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apply
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it is expected to decline again to just under 1.4 individuals in 2030.
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, the population of
India
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 is projected to go up significantly by 2025
at
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to
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 1.4
billion
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people
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, and it is projected to overtake
China
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 and reach nearly 1.6
billion
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people
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 by 2030.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, china, people, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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