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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

School subjects should be chosen based on students’ interests rather than job opportunities

Education
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 materials should be chosen by what students prefer
instead
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 of job chances. Because
this
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 will improve their skills and abilities.
In addition
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, it helps to develop the community.
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 essay will argue that, government should
concern
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be concerned
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on provide
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with providing
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 subjects based on students’
interest
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interests
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. To
began
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begin
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 with,
chosen
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the chosen
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 curriculum depends on what
student
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students
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 admire can make them more
interest
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interested
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 in
education
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.
Due to
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,
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apply
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 people being more productive and energetic when it
becomes
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is
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 related
by
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to
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 emotion.
This
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 can
motivation
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motivate
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 them to study more and get deeper
on
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into
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 the curriculum.
For example
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, USA schools add new materials specific
for
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to
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 students’
matter
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matters
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.
However
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,
this
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 leads to positive results in progress
education
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, and
grab
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grabs
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students
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students'
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 attention.
Secondly
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, modern
education
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method
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methods
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 can prepare students for future careers. There are some individuals who like sports.
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Therefore
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 if
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education
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the education
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 system provides subjects specially for
this
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filed
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field
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,
will
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it will
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 create a successful generation with high experiences.
Moreover
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,
this
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interesting
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apply
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can increase
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the government’
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government’
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government’s
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 revenue. Through which can improve
society
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society's
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 services.
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, as the number of employees
raised
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increases
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 in
community
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the community
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, the number of homeless
in
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on
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streets
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the streets
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 will
incredibly
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significantly
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 reduce. In conclusion, school subjects have a beneficial role worldwide if states
a lowed
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allow
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 a few
of
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apply
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materials which
depends
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depend
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 on their passion. Because
,
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apply
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it
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there
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takes
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is
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place
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apply
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a huge difference in their ability on learning.
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can occur
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,
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 a positive future change
in
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can occur in
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 the country.

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task response
Make your main point clear in the first part of the essay and say it again in the end.
coherence
Link each idea with a clear reason and connect it to the prompt.
grammar
Fix grammar and use correct verb form and pre positions.
lexical
Choose normal words and fix word choice to avoid wrong collocations.
examples
Give real, specific examples to show your point.
organization
Use a clear paragraph for each idea and add a topic sentence at the start of each paragraph.
structure
The essay shows a real aim and there are three body parts.
evidence
There is an attempt to use examples.
purpose
The topic is easy to see and the writer tries to argue.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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