Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household.

The pie chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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the
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the
persentage
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percentage
of utilised
enregy
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energy
in
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Australia
houdhold
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the
majorty
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majority
use of
enrgy
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energy
is heating
shar
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at
42%from
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42% of
the
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all
enregy
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energy
.
while
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the
less
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smallest
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proportion is sighting by 4%,
also
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the smallest presentage in
australin hosehold green hous
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Australian household greenhouse
gas
emmissions
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emissions
is cooking at 3%.
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,the graph
shaws
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australine use of water
abou
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about
30%and other ppolatin shar at 15%
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However
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ther
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there
is
same
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the same
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value in using and emissions in cooling both.
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Also
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electric
take
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takes
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propotions
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proportions
at

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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