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The best way to solve the traffic and transportation problem is to encourage people to live in cities rather than suburbs or countryside. What are the effects of rapid population growth in the city? How can the quality of life city dwellers be maintain?

Encouraging
people
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 to live in cities to solve the traffic and
transportation
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 problem is better than living in
suburbs
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the suburbs
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 or
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the coutryside
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coutryside
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countryside
.There is a main effect of the rapid population growth in the
city
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which
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, which
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 is
pollution
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, and the quality of
the
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apply
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life
city
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 can be maintained by reducing the
number
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 of
transportation
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. The
number
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 of
people
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 in the
city
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 is
increased
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increasing
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 fast
which
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, which
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 reflects
negative
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a negative
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 effect on the air.
As a result
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,
It
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it
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 will cause
a
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apply
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pollution
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 because of the high
numbers
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number
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 of
the
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apply
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cars.The carbon
emmisions
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emissions
 will increase
and
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, and
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it
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they
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 can
causes
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cause
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 many health problems.
For example
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, many countries face a
pollution
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 problem
due to
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 the large
numbers
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number
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 of
the
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cars
,
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.
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Also
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Also,
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 they are suffering
with
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from
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 many
phiysical
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physical
 health
prblems
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problems
. One possible solution may handle the issue is reducing the
number
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 of
transportation
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.
Instead
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 of using
private
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a private
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 car for each person, they should use a bus.
Also
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, if they are going to
tha
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the
 same station, they can go together in the same car.That will reduce the carbon emissions, so the
pollution
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 will
decreased
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decrease
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 as well. After a
periode
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period
 of
time
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time,
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 a positive effect will
reflects
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reflect
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 on
people
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's health.
For instance
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, Saudi Arabia
start
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started
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 a project called
Neom
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the Neom
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 area,
It
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which
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 is a fully clean area with no
transportation
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 to
reduced
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reduce
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the
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apply
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pollution
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 as much as possible. In conclusion,
The
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the
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 best way to solve the traffic and
transportation
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 problem is to encourage
people
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 to live in cities rather than suburbs or
countryside
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the countryside
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.
However
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, it has a negative impact which is
pollution
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 during to the rapid population growth in the
city
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. We can maintain the quality of
the
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apply
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life
city
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 by reducing the
number
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 of
the
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apply
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transportation
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.
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task
Plan your essay with a main idea in the first line, then give 2 to 3 clear points with small facts or examples, and end with a short finish.
coherence
Put a clear topic for each paragraph and use a simple link word to show how ideas go from one to the next.
task
Tell more about how life in the city stays good: parks, clean air, jobs, safety, and health.
grammar
Check grammar: make verb and noun match, use articles correctly, and spell words right.
style
Use simple, clean language and short sentences so your idea is easy to see and not lost.
strength
The piece has a clear view for the topic.
strength
There is a real example (Neom) to show a project.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Overcrowding
  • Urban sprawl
  • Congestion
  • Public transport
  • Pollution
  • Waste management
  • Green spaces
  • Sustainable planning
  • Mixed-use developments
  • Compact city
  • Smart city
  • Affordable housing
  • Social cohesion
  • Infrastructure
  • Metropolitan
  • Ecosystem
  • Urban renewal
  • Zoning regulations
  • Mass transit systems
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