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Writing Samples
Band 5

You have lost your student identification card. This has caused some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter, -advise them of your situation -explain how it is affecting you -request a new card

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform
about
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you about
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 my Student identification
card
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which
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, which
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have been
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was
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 lost today during our school prayer. I am in grade 10th. To start with, in the early morning when everyone was attending prayer
including
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, including
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me
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me,
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i
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I
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 was having my
card
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but
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 as we were leaving that
premise
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premise,
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i
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I
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 think
i
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 might have dropped it somewhere there.
Moreover
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, by
the
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apply
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mid day
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midday
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 when
i
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I
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 went to
library
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the library
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 to get some books
at
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, at
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 that moment
i
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I
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 knew
i
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I
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 was missing it.
This
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card
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 is very
much
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apply
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important for me because even
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if i
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i
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I
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 have to use
computer
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a computer
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 or attend any practical
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classes
classess
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classess,
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i
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I
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 need one.
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, throughout the
day
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day,
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i
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I
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 missed many things
and
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, and
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this
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 might affect my academic score.
It
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I
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 would be really grateful if you
provide
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could provide
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 me
a
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with a
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new
card
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 as soon as possible. I
apologize
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apologise
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 for the mistake which
i
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I
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 made as it is affecting my studies. Thank you for your understanding. Yours faithfully Jay Chawla.

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grammar
Use fewer long lines. Break ideas into short, clear sentences.
structure
Make one idea per paragraph. Start each with a small clue about the idea.
grammar
Check grammar and spell error like card numbers or grade, and use 'could you' when asking.
tone
Keep a polite and formal tone, with a clear request for a new card.
tone
Polite tone with a proper start and end.
content
The letter states all three points: what happened, how it affects you, and what you need.
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