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The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The data provides information about
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the center
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center
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centre
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 of
city
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the city
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Islip
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of Islip
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 and plans for its future expansion.
Overall
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, in
new
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the new
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 development plan main
road
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 has been completely closed off and
became
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has become
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 available only for pedestrians,
while
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dual
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a dual
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 carriageway was built around
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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. Shops on top of
main
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the main
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road
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 are planned to be closed, and a bus station, shopping
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center
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centre
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, car parking and new housing
is
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are
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 going to be built on
this
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 site.
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Also
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Also,
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 half of the housing
area
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 at
bottom
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the bottom
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, including some
area
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 of
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the park
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park
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park,
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 is planned to be converted to
new
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a new
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 housing
area
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. There are
also
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few
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a few
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 small details to mention, as to shops above
main
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the main
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road
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the
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, the
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 bus station is going to be on
far
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the far
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 left,
shopping
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the shopping
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center
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centre
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 is going to be right behind it,
while
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 on
far
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the far
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right
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right,
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 there is
new
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a new
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 housing
area
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 with
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road
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a road
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 connecting it with
carriageway
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the carriageway
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, the car parking is planned to be built between
shopping
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the shopping
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center
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centre
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 and
new
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the new
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 housing.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center, road, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual carriageway
  • pedestrian-only street
  • reroute
  • infrastructure
  • development plan
  • proposed
  • augmentation
  • north side/south side
  • housing/residential area
  • accessibility
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