The diagram below shows the percentage of share of total world production of whe: by Asia, Europe and other part of the world from the years 1840 to 2000. Summaris the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisor where relevant.

the
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bar chart illustrates the percentage
share
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of total
world
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production by
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Asia
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Asia,
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Europa
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Europe
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,
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and
others
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other
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parts of the
world
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from 1840 to 2000.
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It
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provides information on how the contributions of these
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regions
changed over the
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, providing an overview of the global distribution of manufacturing and industrial output across different
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overall
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,
Asia
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's
share
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declined during the early years but
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rose again towards the end of the
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.
Europe
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's
share
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started at the beginning of the
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, increased gradually to reach a peak in the middle of the
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and
then
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declined again towards the end.
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the rest of the
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started at a very low level , rose gradually, and fell slightly at the
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this
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chart shows compared to
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,
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had a much higher
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in 1840.
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then
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fall
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sharply to 30% by 1880,
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Europe
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rose to 45%by 1920,
Asia
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's
share
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dropped to 20% and
Europe
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's reached 50%.
Asia
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gradually
recoveredto 25%in
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recovered to 25% in
1960 and the highest by the end.
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rest of the
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increased steadily and became the
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second-highest
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words share, world, asia, period, europe with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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