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You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part time job. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In you letter, Explain that you would like to apply for the job, give some details of any relevant experience that you have, specify the days and times that would suit you

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter to express my deep interest in the position of a baker in your restaurant as a part-time employee. Currently, I am working as a supervisor at Tim Hortons, a well-renowned restaurant in Canada. Apart from that, I am a full-time student of Sheridan College enrolled in
culinary
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the culinary
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 services course. Actually, I found myself the most suitable candidate for
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 job post because I not only have Canadian client experience but
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 have theoretical knowledge of preparing food as per Canada’s dietary habits.
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 to
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, I am accelerating in the fast-paced environment
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 helps me to achieve my weekly and monthly target sales.
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, I am a certified server and food handler who will bring discipline and regulations to your workplace.
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,
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 you will provide me an opportunity, I will be there for an interview on upcoming
Friday
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Friday,
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 27 December at noon. I will bring my resume and experience certificate
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 other documents. For
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 job, I am available every weekend from Friday to Sunday evening
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apply
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. Looking forward to
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 from you. Yours faithfully, Vishally

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Say why you want the job and what you can bring. Keep facts about past work that fit the bakers job.
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Be clear on the job you want and show you can do it.
structure
Put one idea in each paragraph. Start with why you apply, then show skill you have, then end.
formality
Use a polite greeting and closing.
language
Use plain words. Check for grammar and spelling.
content
If you name a date, be sure it is right or leave it out.
style
Keep sentences short and to the point.
content
The letter shows you want a part time job.
experience
It mentions your past work in a food place.
tone/formality
The tone is formal and polite.
availability
You note when you can work on weekend days.
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