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Climate change is the biggest global challenge today. What solutions can governments and individuals take?

In recent years,
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climate
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the climate
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 crisis has become
most
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the most
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 common concern in
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society.
This
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 essay will investigate
actions
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 for both sides to take to mitigate
this
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 issue
over
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around
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 the
world
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. Do we ever ask ourselves what kind of benefits we provide for
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environment
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the environment
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? Unfortunately, one of the main contributors
of
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this
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 issue is
an
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the
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 increasing number of car
ownerships
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owners
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 in the
world
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. Admittedly, there are a range of upsides
of
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owing
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owning
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 private
cars
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.
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, people are more likely to prefer private vehicles rather than public transport. As it is quite obvious,
everyday
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 more than 150 billion m3
toxic
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of toxic
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 gas is released from
the
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petrol-driven
cars
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which
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, which
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trigger
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triggers
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 depletion of
Ozone
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the Ozone
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 layer in
long
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the long
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 run.
In
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this
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 occasion,
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the government
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government
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government's
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 mission is to invest in public transport to enhance its qualities
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such
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, such
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 as convenience, flexibility
to
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, to
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 push
individuals
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 to use public
transports
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transport
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. Another potential remedy could be to improve advertisement industries to inform society regarding global issues.
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, the person who does not stop polluting and poisoning
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environment
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the environment
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 can be aware of the statistics of pollution made by
individuals
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 on a daily basis with the help of
add
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ads
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 and can actually
realize
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realise
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 how seriously these
actions
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 may lead to global warming. Turning to the
actions
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 that
individuals
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 can take,
individuals
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 can significantly reduce carbon emissions by opting for renewable-energy-powered vehicles,
such
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 as electric
cars
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, thereby promoting a cleaner
environment
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. Conducted research in 2024 reported that using environmentally friendly
cars
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decrease
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decreases
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 the amount of emitted gas three times.
Other
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 major factor is to focus on recycling materials rather than
one use
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 on an individual level. The rate of
consumed
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consumption of
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 materials and products
rise
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rises
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 with an increasing
number of populations
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population
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 in the
world
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.
Thus
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,
cycling
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the cycling
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 trend should be taken into account seriously to prevent polluting nature and water sources. After the
actions
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 that have been carried out,
climate
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 crisis problems can be
blocked
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addressed
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 noticeably. In conclusion, as
climate
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 change has become
on
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one
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 of the significant troubles in the
world
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,
government
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governments
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 and
individuals
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 have
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a responsibilities
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responsibilities
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responsibility
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 to protect
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environment
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the environment
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. Improving
quality
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the quality
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 and accessibility of public transport and investing in
advertisement
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advertising
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 could be carried out by public authorities. In
meantime
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the meantime
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, opting
renewable
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for renewable
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 vehicles and
tendency
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the trend
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over
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of
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 cycling could avert serious
climate
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 issues
over
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around
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 the
world
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task
Make one clear main idea in each paragraph and use a short map in the start so readers know what is next.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas, such as 'also', 'therefore', 'but', and 'however'.
structure
Keep one idea in each paragraph and end with a short rest on the idea.
content
Give a real fact or simple example for each claim to show the idea has proof.
language
Check grammar and use short, plain sentences to avoid mistakes.
task focus
The essay tries to cover both sides of the issue.
content
There are clear ideas on transport and clean energy.
structure
The ending asks for action.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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