People have different expectations for jobs, Some people prefer to do the same job for the company whereas others prefer to change jobs frequently. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Currently, occupation is one of the most important things for
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to the income for every employee.
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,
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an
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opposite thought about their
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--- some prefer to do the same
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for the same company.
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,
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others
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would rather change it recently. Both views will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
First,
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talking about working in the same
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,
this
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could bring benefits because perfectionists
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through repetition and practice, which makes employees become professionals.
This
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makes it easier for them to get through difficult days.
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, having many
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employees could
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brought
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great development for the company.
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focusing on
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who
prefer
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to
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their
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recently
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, it could lead to many advantages
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this
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can be
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explained
in three reasons.
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experiencing new things could
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a
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good mental health for that person.
Second,
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switching
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job
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could help that person to
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what they
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truly suit.
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trying
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job
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can help you gain many new
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and different
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skills, which could improve their self and it's
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good for their
long term
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career. In a nutshell, both options have different advantages-- working in only one
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helps them
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an expert in what
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accomplished.
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, switching
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recently would lead them to have more skills which could help them in their
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job
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.
That is
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why
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can choose what
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suits
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them best.

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Your essay has a clear topic, but you need a stronger clear opinion and a tight plan in the intro and closing sentence.
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Make each paragraph focus on one idea; use linking words to show contrast and flow.
content
You discuss both views, which shows task response effort.
structure
You try to give reasons for both sides, and a closing idea.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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