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Band 5

employers should focus on personality eather than qualification and experience when choosing someone to work . To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement

Some think
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 that companies should choose employees based on personality rather than experience or professional skills. Even knowing
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 could cause potential problems for a
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,
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 still agree with that opinion.
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, acknowledging the problems
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 could create is crucial, so
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 would like to share some. Hiring someone who is not professional yet may slow down
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the businesses
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businesses
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business's
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 development.
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, if you choose a friendly barista
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 who has no clue about coffee, he will likely fail a couple
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, which could lead to customers being disappointed. If it happens too often, your
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 may attract
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 customers, since the place
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 a bad reputation.
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, not every
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 wants to teach their employees, because it takes time to fully train a person who has no experience in the field.
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, when it comes to working with people, personality matters most. I believe that the key to having a successful
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 is to have your workers feel comfortable enough with each other.
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 way they can exchange ideas, help each and show great results. Nowadays, every job requires working with people. So having a patient, disciplined and committed
employee
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 can really be beneficial for both the
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 and the team. It is all about finding someone
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 who is dedicated to the job and is willing to learn. 
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 yourself, you can shape them to do things the way your
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 requires
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also
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recognizing
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 the patterns of the
person
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person's
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behavior
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. It allows you and your team to get used to each other, so
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 would say that if you are ready to make an effort and train an
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, it will be worth it, making your
company
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 more successful and valuable. In conclusion, if a
business
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 has time and resources to teach an
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 with no prior experience and knowledge, it is worth it to hire someone based on their personality, because that person can have all
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the traits
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traits necessary
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necessary traits
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 for working, which could boost
business
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 efficiency.

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Make your main idea clear in the first line.
coherence
Use more links to show how ideas fit, like but, also, so.
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Give more real life examples and facts to back your claim.
grammar
Check small grammar and use 'they' for a person when you do not know the gender.
structure
Keep intro short and make end clear.
lexical
Use short, easy words to keep your work clear.
content
You take a clear side and stay with it.
example
You use one real example to back a point.
insight
You show you know both good and bad sides.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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