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Because of the size of modern cities, it is impossible to solve traffic congestion problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often claimed that traffic
congestion
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 in large
cities
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 is impossible to resolve because their sheer size and population density overwhelm transportation systems.
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 it is undeniable that managing mobility in megacities presents serious challenges, I disagree with the assertion that
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 is unsolvable.
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 complete elimination may be unrealistic,
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 and sustainable reduction is clearly achievable. Admittedly, the scale of modern urban environments creates structural difficulties. As
cities
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 expand and economic activities concentrate in central districts, millions of commuters travel during peak hours, leading to a persistent imbalance between
road
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 capacity and demand. Even when governments attempt to expand infrastructure, additional
road
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 space can generate “induced demand,” encouraging more people to drive and eventually restoring
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 levels.
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, land scarcity and environmental concerns restrict
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 expansion of highways. These factors explain why achieving entirely
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-free conditions is unlikely.
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, the impossibility argument overlooks the effectiveness of demand-oriented transport policies. The core issue is not
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road
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 shortage but excessive reliance on private vehicles. When authorities regulate vehicle usage and strengthen public transport systems,
congestion
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 can be significantly alleviated.
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, Singapore introduced electronic
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 pricing and strict vehicle ownership quotas, which discourage unnecessary car use during peak hours.
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, despite high population density, traffic flow remains comparatively stable and predictable. By reducing the number of vehicles competing for limited
road
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 space,
cities
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 can improve efficiency without endlessly expanding infrastructure.
This
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 demonstrates that
congestion
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 is manageable when policy addresses travel behaviour rather than merely
road
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 supply. In conclusion,
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 the size of modern
cities
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 makes traffic management complex and complete eradication improbable, it is inaccurate to describe
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 as impossible to solve. Through coordinated regulation and strategic planning, meaningful improvement is not only possible but realistic.

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task response
Your view is clear and the essay has reasons and a sample to back it. To improve, add more real world examples from two other places and a short closing note on why this helps city life.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The essay uses clear groups and some linking words. To improve, use more link words to show cause, result, and contrast, and keep each paragraph to one main idea.
structure
Clear view and steady line of thought.
analysis
Good use of contrast and plan in body and conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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