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Band 2

The leaders or directors of organizations are often elderly people. However, some sat that young people can also take the lead of organizations or companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Leadership plays a pivotal role behind every
sucess
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success
 of any
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organization
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. Owing to
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, some folks think that young
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apply
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people
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 can take place
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a
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leader
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leadership role
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 in any company. I partially agree with
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 statement. In
upcoming
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paragraphs
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i
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I
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 will discuss some viewpoints. To
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in
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 every
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organisation
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organization
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organization,
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 we saw
older
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that older
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people
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 can make decisions because of their higher-level experience in the
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organization
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.
A part
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 from
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, older personal have
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more
 ability to take stress and make good decisions. In the
workplace
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workplace,
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 they know how to tackle challenging situations with their years of experience. On the
otherside
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other side
, some argue that
young
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the young
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 generation
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needs
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 to get
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positions
 as
director
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directors
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 of
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organization
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organisations
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 because they have
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the abity
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abity
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ability
 to do
.
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Moreover
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, young
people
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 have more complex thinking because of their generation gap
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according
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 to older
people
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.
A part
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 from
this
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,
youngster
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youngsters
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have
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are
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 more familiar with technology gadgets and give more strength to
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the organization
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organization
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organisation
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.
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,
although
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 older
people
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 have more experience in any
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organization
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 to face challenges despite
youngster
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youngsters
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 have more energy to run any
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organization
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organisation
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.

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task response
Task response: You partly answer the question but need a clearer view. Say your exact view in one line, then give 1 or 2 ideas to back it up. Use simple, real life examples.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use clear and separate paragraphs. Put one main idea in each paragraph. Use linking words like First, Also, But, However, In addition, Finally. Check spell and form to help flow.
strength
You show some idea about old leaders vs young leaders.
strength
You state that you partly agree with the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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