The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentages of the graduates of Brighton
University
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, seven years ago, and their different sectors.
Overall
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, the graduates from
bringhton
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Brighton University
university
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ara
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are
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diversed
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diversified
between service industries, manufacturing industry, politics and
goverment
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government
,
edcation
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education
and others The
University
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of Brighton analysis shows
the
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that
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there is 33% of the
guraduates
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graduates
study
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who study
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service industries, and
also
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the is more than 16% of the graduates who study the manufacturing industry
and
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, and
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also
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there is a number of politics and
goverment sudies
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government studies
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, it
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it
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which
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is around 12.1% .
and
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And
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the
last
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big sector in Brighton
University
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by
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, by
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around 15% is education.
On the other hand
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, there is
also
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a lot of small
are
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areas
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lise
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less
than 10%, services by 5,6%, and the transportation and warehousing by 7.8% and science and technology by 7.3%.Another point worth mentioning is that the sport is only 0.1%, and
also
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the charity work is 0.3%, and there are other sectors around 2.8%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words university with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • employment sectors
  • graduates
  • significant
  • percentage
  • trend
  • compare
  • most chosen
  • least popular
  • distribution
  • highlight
  • graduate destinations
  • notable
  • cohesive understanding
  • employment trends
  • pie chart
  • bar chart
  • overview
  • chosen career paths
  • sector popularity
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