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Writing Samples
Band 1

Percentage of students proficient in a foreign language. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The given graph demonstrates the
quantity
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number
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 of pupils
become
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who become
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 experts in
additional
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an additional
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 language. It is crystal clear that
,
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apply
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 one of the most striking
feature
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features
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 was observed in India
and
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, and
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 Romania came second and followed by Vietnam,
while
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 the rest of
other
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the
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 countries represented
least
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the least
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figure
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figures
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. In terms of
India
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India,
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was
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it had
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 the highest figure for both male and
females
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female
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 categories with 56% and 77%,
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Moreover
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moreover
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moreover,
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 Romanian male students stood at 42% but female ones
was
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were
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 64$,
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while
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apply
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followed by Vietnam consisted of 40% for
male
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males
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 and 56% for females.
Percentage
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The percentage
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 of Russian individuals approximately stood at
same
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the same
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 level for both genders,
while
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number
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the number
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 of girl students approximately doubled in comparison with boys from 32% to 14%.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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 in Thailand
male
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, male
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 students’ rate
constitute
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constitutes
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 33% but females
consisted
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make
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of
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up
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 27%.

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data
Check the numbers in the graph. Use the right data and stay clear.
structure
Make a plan before you write: short intro, view, details, then a small end.
cohesion
Use linking words to show how ideas go from one to the next.
grammar
Use simple words and fix major grammar mistakes so your points are clear.
content
Some effort to compare boys and girls in each country.
structure
Attempts to name more than one country and to point to the big ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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