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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both views and give your opinionFind essays with the same topic.

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task
Plan what you want to say before you write. Decide your view before the end, then give two clear ideas for each side and end with your own view.
coherence
Make links between ideas. Use simple words to show how one idea leads to the next.
structure
Make each paragraph about one main idea. Begin with a topic sentence. End with a short tie to the next idea.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Use short, clear sentences to avoid errors.
idea
The essay shows the idea that balance can be good.
content
There is mention of real life actions like clubs.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadening perspectives
  • enhancing employability
  • fostering innovation
  • interdisciplinary knowledge
  • distraction
  • dilution of focus
  • workload
  • in-depth knowledge
  • expertise
  • academic performance
  • narrow perspective
  • lack of adaptability
  • holistic development
  • specializing
  • diversifying academic interests
  • career goals
  • learning preferences
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