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You stayed in a hotel and was not satisfied with service. Write a letter to manager. - why you chose this hotel - what problems did you face - tell the manager what to do

Dear Sir or Madam, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with your
hotel
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 service during my stay at your
hotel
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 from 24th February to 26th February with my family. I primarily chose your
hotel
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becuase
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because
 of your
well
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good
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 reputation and excellent reviews online. When I visited your website, there were many excellent advertisements regarding your
facillities
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facilities
. Unfortunately, your service did not meet my expectations.
To begin
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room
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 with
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a beach-view
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beach-view
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 and a spacious window. But during check-in, I was told that
that
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the
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room
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has
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had
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 been occupied and they
are
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were
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 sorry and
they
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apply
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would provide me
a
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with a
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better
room
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. I took it positively
but
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, but
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 as I entered my
room
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, it was very dirty and congested. The curtains, bed sheets, and towels were not properly cleaned, seemed used, and the accessories were not properly
organized
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organised
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. What was even more frustrating
is
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was
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 that the air-conditioning system was not working at night
which
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, which
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 nearly suffocated all of us. I tried calling the helpline number several times,
they
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and they
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 assured me that they
will
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would
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 fix the problems as soon as possible
but
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, but
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 no one came to address the issue
which
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, which
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 was very frustrating. I called
to
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apply
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your
room
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 service for dinner multiple times, but couldn't get any response
and
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 we all had to go outside for dinner. All of my family members had to suffer
becuase
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because
 of your mismanagement. Given the reputation of your
hotel
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, I was quite surprised by these problems. I would strongly recommend that you improve staff responsiveness and ensure that rooms are thoroughly inspected before guests arrive. Proper maintenance of essential facilities,
such
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 as air-conditioning, is
also
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 crucial to maintaining customer satisfaction. I hope you will take necessary steps so that necessary improvements are made
and
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, and
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 guests do not encounter
simillar
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similar
 problems in future. I will really appreciate
if
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it if
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 you inform me
if
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of
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 any actions taken. Thank you. With Regards, Keya

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content
Split into clear parts: why you chose the hotel, problems you faced, and what you want the manager to do.
language
Use short lines. Fix small spelling and grammar errors.
structure
Keep one idea in each paragraph.
content
The letter shows clear facts like dates and what was wrong.
tone
The tone is calm and you ask for a fix.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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