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The graphs below show the percentage of math graduates and other graduates who got full-time job after graduating from a university in Australia, and also show the average salary of both these types of graduates, from 2004 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of
math
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graduates
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 and other
graduates
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 who got full-time jobs after graduating from an Australian university, and the table shows the average wage of both these kinds of
graduates
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, from 2004 to 2012.
Overall
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, the percentage of full-time
workers
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 holding a
math
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 degree was higher than that
in
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 other
graduates
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.
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, the average salary of
math
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graduates
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 was more than that of other degrees
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 from 2004 to 2012. As can be seen in the line graph, the percentage of
math
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graduates
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 who got full-time jobs was 80% in 2004
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this
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 figure increased gradually and reached a peak of nearly 90% in 2006,
then
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 slowly dropped and accounted for 80% again in 2012.
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, just about 60% of full-time
workers
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 held other degrees in 2004. The number of full
workers
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 with other
graduates
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 experienced a significant trend in 2006, with 80% and accounted for more than 80% in 2008.
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,
this
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 figure rapidly fell after that and remained the same as in
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 with 60% in 2012. Regarding the average salary of
graduates
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, full-time employees with
math
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graduates
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 had a tendency to have higher salaries than those in other fields. Even though they had the same average wage in the
beginning
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 with $41,000 in 2004, both figures gradually rose over time , and in 2012,
math
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 graduate
workers
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 received an average $56,000, which was more than $5,000 compared to the employees who hold other degrees.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words math, graduates, workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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