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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps present an industrial
area
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 in the
town
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 of Norbiton. The first
map
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 presents industrial areas in
present
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the present
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times
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apply
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, and the second
map
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 presents
planned
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the planned
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 future development of industrial areas. These two maps have many differences
from
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both
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apply
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of
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between
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 them. The first
map
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 presents the industrial
area
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 in the
town
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 of Norbiton in
present
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the present
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 time.
This
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area
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 looks like it's located in the countryside without any houses or buildings
,
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. There’s
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there’s
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there are
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 many factories located in
this
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area
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, and there is a river
on
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to
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 the north between
farmland
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 and factories.
Also
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, there's a
town
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 located
at
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on
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 the
west
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western
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 side of the
area
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. The second
map
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 shows the planned future development of the industrial
area
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 in the
town
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 of Norbiton.
This
Linking Words
map
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planned
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plans
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 to replace factories and
farmland
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 by building a small
town
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.
This
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map
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 shows many housing, shops, medical
centers
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centres
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, playgrounds and schools. That means
this
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map
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 was planned to change into a small
town
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. And
also
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 built a bridge to connect to other housing that
have
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had
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 been
farmland
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 before, and
farmland
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 planned to be moved to the east of those housing.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, town, map, farmland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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