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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph illustrates various
type
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types
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 of post-school qualifications in
Australis
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Australia
 and the rate of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 who had them in 1999. Looking at the chart more closely, the
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diploma
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diplomas
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 and degrees had a remarkable difference without
Bachelor's
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a Bachelor's
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 degree. Skilled Vocational
Diploma
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 had the most significant
gap
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comepared
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compared
 with other bars, especially the female proportion was the lowest in the whole graph
and
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 the male rate reached
peak
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a peak
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 at 90percent which is the highest point in
this
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 chart.
Other
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The other
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 graph
had
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also had
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also
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 a
gap
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 between male and female rates
, in
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. In
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 post
graduate
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post-graduate
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diploma
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, there
a
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apply
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was more than
twofold
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a twofold
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 difference.
In
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An
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undergrauate
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undergraduate
diploma
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 had a
gap
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 which was almost double.
Master
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Master's
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 degree had only
20
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a 20
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%
gap
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words diploma, gap with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • qualification
  • higher education
  • vocational training
  • Bachelor's degree
  • diploma
  • gender disparity
  • employment
  • statistics
  • representation
  • trend
  • data analysis
  • implication
  • education attainment
  • demographics
  • chart overview
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