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Band 5.5

The pie charts below show the comparison of exports in Great Britain over five years.

The pie graph provides information about
export
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exports
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 in different fields in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom in two separate
yeats
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years
: 2010 and 2015.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that
machinery
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the machinery
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 sphere
always
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is always
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 at
peak
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its peak
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. Another striking feature is that
,
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apply
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 all fields illustrated
and
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an
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 upward trend,
expect of
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except for
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 pharmacy. Looking at the details, as regards vehicles and machinery, they accounted for 28 and 29 per
cent
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 in 2010 respectively, and witnessed a minimal growth
for
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of
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 one per
cent
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.
On the other hand
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, organic chemicals increased gradually from sevent percent to one-tenth, and plastic improved from nine per
cent
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 to 13
in
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per cent in
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 2015.
By contrast
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, when it comes to pharmacy, it went in the opposite direction. At the beginning, it made up almost one-
third,
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without six per
cent
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.
Nevertheless
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, it experienced a significant reduction to 18 per
cent
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at the end
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 of the period in question.

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