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The graph shows the contribution of UK economy . Summarise the information.

The given bar graphs describe how much each sector in the UK contributed to its economy.
Overall
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, two of the chosen sectors — Agriculture and Manufacturing — seemed to contribute less over the years,
while
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 Business and Financial showed an upward trend.
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 with, 50% of the UK
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 growth was from Agriculture in 1900, with a slight increase by approximately 1% in the next 5 decades.
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, the percentage plummeted to only 10% in 1975 before continuing to decrease to almost zero in 2000. As for Manufacturing,
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 the beginning of the 19th century, its contribution started at about 45% and kept dropping to only about 15%.
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, Business and Financial began with the least contribution at around 5% before climbing up to almost 40% and became the highest contributor among the others.

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