IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Some people think that living in a city can give a lot of benefits in terms of health. Others think that living in the village is the best choice for a healthy lifestyle. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some
people
Use synonyms
 think that living in a
city
Use synonyms
 can give a
lot
Use synonyms
 of
benefits
Use synonyms
 in
terms
Use synonyms
 of
health
Use synonyms
.
Others
Use synonyms
 think that living in the
village
Use synonyms
 is the best
choice
Use synonyms
 for a healthy
lifestyle
Use synonyms
. Discuss
both
Use synonyms
views
Use synonyms
 and give your
opinion
Use synonyms
. Some
people
Use synonyms
 think that living in a
city
Use synonyms
 can give a
lot
Use synonyms
 of
benefits
Use synonyms
 in
terms
Use synonyms
 of
health
Use synonyms
.
Others
Use synonyms
 think that living in the
village
Use synonyms
 is the best
choice
Use synonyms
 for a healthy
lifestyle
Use synonyms
. Discuss
both
Use synonyms
views
Use synonyms
 and give your
opinion
Use synonyms
. Some
people
Use synonyms
 think that living in a
city
Use synonyms
 can give a
lot
Use synonyms
 of
benefits
Use synonyms
 in
terms
Use synonyms
 of
health
Use synonyms
.
Others
Use synonyms
 think that living in the
village
Use synonyms
 is the best
choice
Use synonyms
 for a healthy
lifestyle
Use synonyms
. Discuss
both
Use synonyms
views
Use synonyms
 and give your
opinion
Use synonyms
. Some
people
Use synonyms
 think that living in a
city
Use synonyms
 can give a
lot
Use synonyms
 of
benefits
Use synonyms
 in
terms
Use synonyms
 of
health
Use synonyms
.
Others
Use synonyms
 think that living in the
village
Use synonyms
 is the best
choice
Use synonyms
 for a healthy
lifestyle
Use synonyms
. Discuss
both
Use synonyms
views
Use synonyms
 and give your
opinion
Use synonyms
. Some
people
Use synonyms
 think that living in a
city
Use synonyms
 can give a
lot
Use synonyms
 of
benefits
Use synonyms
 in
terms
Use synonyms
 of
health
Use synonyms
.
Others
Use synonyms
 think that living in the
village
Use synonyms
 is the best
choice
Use synonyms
 for a healthy
lifestyle
Use synonyms
. Discuss
both
Use synonyms
views
Use synonyms
 and give your
opinion
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Write a full essay with your own ideas. Do not copy the task many times.
task response
Answer all parts: talk about city, village, and your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Use one clear introduction, two body parts, and one ending.
coherence and cohesion
Add main ideas and small examples to support each point.
task response
You gave the full task question, so the topic is clear.
coherence and cohesion
The writing is easy to follow because the same sentence is repeated clearly.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: