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Now a days people make new friends through social networks and Internet chat groups. some people think this is good other think that face to face interaction is essential discuss both views and give your opinion.

In
this
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 advanced era, many
people
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 think that making friends using social media is better than having physical interaction with other
people
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion regarding the same.
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 with, there are many social media platforms where individuals can make online friends ,
such
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 as Instagram, Snapchat, Facebork and many more. With the help of the internet ,
people
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 from different places, cultures and languages connect with each other through texting and calling. Many individuals find it more convenient as it saves time for travelling for having face-to-face conversations, as one can sit at home and easily communicate with
each other
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others
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. It is better for those who are introverted and prefer chatting over
meetings
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.
On the other hand
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, physical interaction is more beneficial as it helps in understanding the body better. In-person
meetings
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 can easily tell us about the behaviour of another person.
In addition
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 to it,facial expressions play a great role in understanding other
people
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's thoughts.
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, the survey includes stronger friendships among individuals who prefer
meetings
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, whether once a month or a week.
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, both ways are convenient, depending on the
people
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. I believe that real
meetings
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 are more essential to know the person better, as online chatting can create more conflicts because one can't really tell whether the other person is real, genuine , or trying to express.

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task response
Answer both sides more fully. You talk about online friends and real meetings, but some ideas are short.
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Give your opinion in a clearer way in the body, not only at the end.
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Use one clear example with more detail. The survey example is not clear enough.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body, and end, so the reader can follow it.
coherence and cohesion
Link some ideas more smoothly. A few sentences feel separate, not fully joined.
coherence and cohesion
Develop each main point more. Some points are stated but not explained enough.
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You discuss both views and give your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are both present.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is easy to follow because each paragraph has one main idea.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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