The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women.

The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women.
The line chart details the
birth
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rate per 1000 British
women
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in England across different age groups between 1973 and 2020. Looking from a general perspective, it is readily apparent that the
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rate among
women
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aged under 20 and over 40 recorded the lowest figures.
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the numbers for British
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in
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20s and 30s experienced more significant fluctuations over the years . In 1973,
women
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aged 20 to 25 registered the highest
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rate at precisely 120
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number witnessed a sharp decline to finish at 20 in 2020. Meanwhile, the rates for
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aged 28 to 34 followed an upward trend, standing at 80 by the end of the period.
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, the
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rates for
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aged under 20
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relatively stable,
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at 20 and
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the period at the same number.
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,
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older than 40 recorded nearly 15 in 1973 and dropped to just above 5 per 1000
women
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in 2020.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • women aged 15 to 44
  • births per 1000 women
  • rise
  • fall
  • go up
  • go down
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • lowest point
  • highest point
  • figure
  • rate
  • trend
  • overall
  • at the start
  • at the end
  • during the period
  • remain stable
  • change a lot
  • slight rise
  • sharp fall
  • gradual decrease
  • reach a peak
  • drop again
  • compared with
  • higher than
  • lower than
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