The graph below shows the percentage of workers from five different European countries that were absent for a day or more due to illness from 1991 to 2001.

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illustrates
the percentage of employess that missed work for
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24 hours or more
due to
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sickness from 1991 to 2001 in five European nations.
Overall
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, the percentage of absentees remained relatively stable in Germany and the UK,
while
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it increased in Sweden and the Netherlands and decreased in France. With regards to the group of countries that recorded relatively stable rates of absent workers
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illness,
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Germany
averaged approximately 1.5% from 1991 to 2001,
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the UK recorded slightly higher figures at 2.5% throughout the period.
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, France was the only country that saw an improvement in worker attendance rates. After starting off the period with the highest average of sick employees at 5% in 1991, it experienced a rapid decline to 3% in 1996 and
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plateaued to 3% from1997 to 2001.
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, the issue of
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absenteeism worsened in Sweden and the Netherlands over the surveyed time. Sweden
remainded
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remained
relatively stable at 3% from 1991 to 1995, after which the percentage grew progressively to 4.8% in 2001,
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the Netherlands fluctuated, moving to 5% in 1992, falling to 4% in 1996 and
then
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finally
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recovered to 5.3%
at the end
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